In that moment

by Jon Ray on February 8, 2010

When she called him, she was nearly in tears, her voice jettisoning between cracked frustration and a hopeless whimper. Why was it that the people and ideas she had invested so much time into had only resulted in dead-end paths? What was the point? Where was she supposed to go from here?

After she had exhausted her situation and talked it into the ground, he invited her over to his building. It was unseasonably cold out and a recent rain was now crystalizing over everything it had touched earlier in the day. He filled the backseat of his car with blankets, pillows, coloring books and crayons. In large silver thermoses, he poured piping hot chocolate—extra chocolate, extra marshmallows. Then, drove to the parking garage roof and left the heater running.

When she arrived, they embraced for a long time, his slow, deliberate breaths calming her, as they rode the dimly lit elevator to the roof. She tried voicing one of her many frustrations, but after staring deep into her eyes, showing he would listen forever if she needed him to, her worries seemed to melt away.

The two of them walked out onto the roof, the collected water now frozen solid. “What are we doing here?” She asked. His ideas, hopelessly romantic, he answered, “I thought we could dance.” And so, with the lights of the city skyline bouncing off the slick reflection of the ice, the two of them slid about, falling countless times, and attempted to do something, anything, that resembled dancing in some frame or fashion—each failed attempt beautiful.

When it got to be too cold—both of their cheeks red, breath hot on the other’s face—he grabbed her hand and they retreated into the hatchback of his car. Now, comfortably insulated with old quilts, pillows, and sheets sporting cartoon heroes, it was the perfect fort. A giant sleeping bag designed so they could be near each other—pouring cup after cup of hot cocoa.

He wanted to set up a white picket fence around his car and live in that moment forever, taking special note every time she smiled or laughed. She was beautiful when she smiled and he couldn’t help but find happiness in her joy.

Tomorrow she would go back to the other boy. Try and work out her problems with someone else. Make herself available for that perfect guy she just hadn’t, yet, found. But, tonight, there were kittens in capes to be colored blue and children’s books to be read aloud. Tonight, there was hot chocolate to drink and, oh yes, popcorn to be tossed into each others’ mouths. Tonight, she could tell him anything and he would listen, intently. He would love to hear her.

So, they stayed in the backseat of that car for as long as they could. Eyes locked. Inhibitions lost. And, in that moment, it was perfect.

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  • Mannequin_Queen
    I'm speechless. I think I would love to read anything that you write. And, yes, what a total romantic you are.....wish there were more like you.
    You remind me of my son when he drove from Houston to Austin to Houston in the middle of the night to get his favorite girl ginger pancakes from Kerby Lane so she would have them for breakfast the next morning...................................... She dumped him.
  • jonray
    Yes, I am tragically romantic, just like your son. I, too, have driven hundreds of miles, spent thousands of flyer miles and even more dollars trying to win the heart of some young vixen that just isn't that into me. Whoa is me. I'm able to keep living because I know that my efforts will be adored by some beautiful young lady at some point in my life and the thought of eventually finding her keeps me moving.

    That...and all the kinky bedroom activities I'll have to endure, in the meantime, while I weed through the bad seeds. ;)
  • Micherre
    Fantastic word choices near the end. I'm a girl, so i've read a thousand and one too many romances. That being said, I saw a lot of similarities (and, assuming that this did in fact actually happen to you, that's a good thing) in the earlier end of the article, but, as it progressed, your special brand of 'odd' started to elbow it's way to the top. I'll admit I was entirely picturing the scene, throwing popcorn with you, secretly hoping she would pick the thoughtful best friend.
    So overall, I'd give you a thumbs up for your story, and two for your adventure.
  • jonray
    Thanks, Micherre. I've decided that I'm going to start posting more of the stuff that I write in my journals. At one time, I thought that things like this were too personal, or didn't fit the cohesive message I was trying to put out with this blog (was there ever one?). But, I've decided that this blog should be a way for me to test out the real things that I'm writing about and instead of waiting for perfection, I'm just going to post, trying to tap into what I'm really feeling.

    I've been slacking on this blog due to the book that I've been writing, but I plan on posting daily, again. So, I appreciate your words, your support and your thumbs up. It means a lot.

    "...your special brand of 'odd'" - I like this. ;)
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